Great Short!

I think I was in 5th grade before I was allowed to write in pen. It's a stark contrast to many schools in Europe, where they are already writing *with fountain pens* in kindergarten.

Cute story.

Nice story idea. Clean up your line work. No extraneous squiggles. And don't use gradients if you can find another way. For a kickball, for example, that shouldn't be too hard.
Good luck and till next time.

Nice visual

Nice visual effect. Let's see where you take it when it's ready.

Well Drawn but boring

Drawn and colored very well. Get's boring fast.

Fun Game, but not Random

Random means "lacking a definite plan, purpose, or pattern", not "lacking a unified style".

Fun game, nonetheless.